Comments on: My Chapter is Up https://www.jackieashenden.com/my-chapter-is-up/ Wed, 18 Feb 2009 15:51:00 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=6.9.4 By: Suzanne https://www.jackieashenden.com/my-chapter-is-up/#comment-181 Wed, 18 Feb 2009 15:51:00 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=584#comment-181 Jackie – this is nothing to do with your lovely chapter, but I had to let you know…

Someone from Milton Keynes arrived on my blog earlier today by searching google for you.

You’re famous.

🙂

]]> By: Lucy https://www.jackieashenden.com/my-chapter-is-up/#comment-180 Wed, 18 Feb 2009 13:30:00 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=584#comment-180 Hmm, the conflict thing is a tricky one. Would be most interested to see what the eds (and you, Jackie!) have to say about it 🙂

]]> By: Elisabeth https://www.jackieashenden.com/my-chapter-is-up/#comment-179 Wed, 18 Feb 2009 12:48:00 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=584#comment-179 I loved your 1st chapter – read it over on iheartpresents, and thought it had everything. An incredibly sexy hero, a determined heroine, motivation, conflict, writing sexy enough to send goosebumps down my spine, etc. etc.. Did I say loved it?

However I am not sure I understand the MH editorial comments regarding the conflict being based on what they did rather than who they were.

Surely the who they are bit is what has has driven their actions, and won’t this form the basis of the internal conflict between the two of them which will follow?

Sorry, but my eurka moment has obviously not yet arrived… arrrrgh

]]> By: Janet https://www.jackieashenden.com/my-chapter-is-up/#comment-178 Wed, 18 Feb 2009 11:17:00 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=584#comment-178 “I tried putting it in when I was asked to do revisions and they liked it, but sadly it wasn’t just the conflict that was at issue.”

I’m really surprised that this chapter didn’t work for MH (after you added internal conflict) I’d love to know more about why it couldn’t have been tweaked to fit. So as soon as the eds comments go up I’ll be back to your blog to read more thoughts on it.

I thought it was a great first chapter and was really surprised that it turned out to be unsuitable

]]> By: Aideen https://www.jackieashenden.com/my-chapter-is-up/#comment-177 Wed, 18 Feb 2009 10:15:00 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=584#comment-177 Hi Jackie,

I really enjoyed reading your chapter, honest to God. But yeah, I can see how the conflict just wouldn’t work in a Mod Heat. Perhaps you’ll ‘discover’ something new about these guys and have the opportunity to use it a later stage.

I think Modern Heat can, at times, be hard to grasp. I know that people have been told to ‘alpha’ up the hero yet the guidelines state clearly that the MH hero is really an ‘alpha in training’. How much alpha is enough then? And the conflict, while not so tragic or intense as a Presents still has to justify a lot of action/reaction and carry for the whole story. So, how much conflict? And if the hero is the key driver of the romance in a MH, is the story more his than hers???

Jeez, I’m great at doing my own head in at times. Anyway, enough on that. I look forward to reading the editorial commentary on your chapter and hope I can learn something from it.
Well done,

Aideen.

]]> By: Jackie Ashenden https://www.jackieashenden.com/my-chapter-is-up/#comment-176 Wed, 18 Feb 2009 02:19:00 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=584#comment-176 I’ll probably wait until they post the editorial comment before I put up anything from my feedback letter, Rach. Just in case I repeat stuff. And the archetypes they mentioned were more to do with social archetypes – the hippy vs the property developer rather than character archetypes. Does that make sense?

]]> By: Rachael Johns https://www.jackieashenden.com/my-chapter-is-up/#comment-175 Wed, 18 Feb 2009 00:20:00 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=584#comment-175 Can’t wait to read more about your chap and what you’ve learnt! Interesting that you mentioned ‘archetypes’ – I ALWAYS use them in my planning stages now.

Have just chosen archetypes for new story – hero is The Charmer and heroine is The Spunky Kid!

]]> By: Jackie Ashenden https://www.jackieashenden.com/my-chapter-is-up/#comment-174 Tue, 17 Feb 2009 22:17:00 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=584#comment-174 Jo, that makes a lot of sense. Yes, I know what you mean about one-sided conflict. I’ve read a few like that. And yes, it’s soooo hard to get right. It took me months to understand about internal conflict and it wasn’t until they’d pointed it out in my chapter that I got it.
I tried putting it in when I was asked to do revisions and they liked it, but sadly it wasn’t just the conflict that was at issue.

]]> By: Joanne Cleary https://www.jackieashenden.com/my-chapter-is-up/#comment-173 Tue, 17 Feb 2009 22:07:00 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=584#comment-173 I can see what you are saying about the conflict being external … but I’ve read a fair few books lately where there only seems to be one sided conflicts. The woman can’t trust because of x,y,z but the H chases her down and eventually she gives in. It’s a very difficult thing to get right, it seems, so the conflict is truly there and not fabricated.

I hope I make sense, it’s late here!

]]> By: Jackie Ashenden https://www.jackieashenden.com/my-chapter-is-up/#comment-172 Tue, 17 Feb 2009 21:34:00 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=584#comment-172 Oh, thanks Suzanne! Glad you did. Having editors like your writing is one thing, but having everyone else like it is quite another.

I want to post a bit more about the conflict in my chapter and a few other things like archetypes so do have a read. And also ask me anything. Honestly the comment was gold dust.

Thanks Stephanie. I hope my revisions come soon too – are you listening Richmond? 🙂

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