Comments on: The Rudeness of the Frenchman https://www.jackieashenden.com/the-rudeness-of-the-frenchman/ Sat, 20 Mar 2010 20:54:41 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=7.0.2 By: Jackie Ashenden https://www.jackieashenden.com/the-rudeness-of-the-frenchman/#comment-2153 Sat, 20 Mar 2010 20:54:41 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=452#comment-2153 Suzanne – yay! I find him quite intriguing too, I have to admit.

Lacey – that was my feeling too. The heroine does know he’s in pain – she gives him some painkillers. And that’s when the fun REALLY starts. Hahaha. 🙂

]]> By: Lacey Devlin https://www.jackieashenden.com/the-rudeness-of-the-frenchman/#comment-2152 Sat, 20 Mar 2010 04:34:56 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=452#comment-2152 People who are in a constant level of high pain get irritated and it’s impossible to hide that all the time. If you want to water it down perhaps the heroine could make a connection between the pain and irritiability. Chronic pain is a VERY common condition and a lot of people will be able to relate to him, especially when he’s not at his best 🙂 I love it!

]]> By: Suzanne Jones https://www.jackieashenden.com/the-rudeness-of-the-frenchman/#comment-2151 Fri, 19 Mar 2010 21:31:48 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=452#comment-2151 I wouldn’t be put off your Frenchman by the situation you’ve described – I’d be intrigued…
Scrap that – I AM intrigued.

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]]> By: Jackie Ashenden https://www.jackieashenden.com/the-rudeness-of-the-frenchman/#comment-2150 Fri, 19 Mar 2010 21:19:00 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=452#comment-2150 Maisey – cheers lovie! For reading and for your comments. He likes you too btw. And he thanks you for saving the cat.

]]> By: Maisey https://www.jackieashenden.com/the-rudeness-of-the-frenchman/#comment-2149 Fri, 19 Mar 2010 20:21:30 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=452#comment-2149 Well, I read it, and I sent you comments. 😀 I have to say, I find him quite sexy. I’d save that cat for sure. Rawr.

]]> By: Jackie Ashenden https://www.jackieashenden.com/the-rudeness-of-the-frenchman/#comment-2148 Fri, 19 Mar 2010 18:40:39 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=452#comment-2148 Rach – yeah, they ARE supposed to be rude. Lol!

Kirsty – I’m beginning to think a bit more from his POV might be just the ticket.

Michelle – yes, he does get some save the cat moments and he’s much more polite in chapter 2. The ‘forwardness’ isn’t too forward – he doesn’t kiss her or anything – he’s just a bit clumsy so I guess I could move it. I might consider starting in his POV first though I’ll have to change it back later in the chapter. Good advice anyway.

Maisey – the fault my lie with my execution. Lol!

Janette – love drunken comments on my blog! Hee hee. Thanks for your faith in the Frenchman.

Sally – yes, he is MUCH less grumpy in the second chapter. And actually, he’s less grumpy in the second half of the first now I remember.

]]> By: Sally Clements https://www.jackieashenden.com/the-rudeness-of-the-frenchman/#comment-2147 Fri, 19 Mar 2010 16:26:55 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=452#comment-2147 I agree with Michelle, A save the cat moment would be good to show that he’s not a total boor, but instead a grumpy alpha. I love grumpy alphas, and as long as he’s not to bad in the second chapter or we have some reason why he’s not too bad, I’d say let him at it! (being rude that is)

]]> By: Janette Radevski https://www.jackieashenden.com/the-rudeness-of-the-frenchman/#comment-2146 Fri, 19 Mar 2010 13:23:14 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=452#comment-2146 probably not the best time to comment (umm have had a full bottle of vino) but rude and crude all the way! I agree it all in the execution and you can do it my friend.

]]> By: Maisey https://www.jackieashenden.com/the-rudeness-of-the-frenchman/#comment-2145 Fri, 19 Mar 2010 09:21:54 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=452#comment-2145 Jackie, I haven’t read the Frenchman yet (I need to!) but I kind of like a rude alpha, I have to say. All in the execution.

]]> By: Michelle Styles https://www.jackieashenden.com/the-rudeness-of-the-frenchman/#comment-2144 Fri, 19 Mar 2010 08:26:22 +0000 http://jackieashenden.com/?p=452#comment-2144 The reader does need to fall in love with your hero and so I would suggest starting with his POV. YOu want to give him a Save the Cat moment.

It may be that you have to move the forwardness to chapter 2.

That said I did start Impoverished Miss in the heroine’s POV to set the stage, and then shifted over to hero’s once they were together.
If the reader can understand, the reader can forgive.

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