I guess I’m pondering this more as I’m doing final edits for Finn and knowing that after these are done, he’ll be going out to reviewers and OTHER PEOPLE will be reading my book!! People who might think he’s a total douche and don’t get why he should be with my heroine.

As well as being totally freaked out by this, I’m also kind of sanguine because hey, not everyone is going to like your books or your characters. But that being said, I’m interested to know what pushes people’s buttons when it comes to a hero.

Myself, I’m very forgiving of heroes.  If the motivation is there, he can get away with anything basically and I hate it when writers water their heroes down in the name of political correctness or because they’re trying to make him overly sympathetic. If he’s angry, I want to be shown his anger and if he’s angry with the heroine then so be it. Because why should heroines be the only ones who are allowed to get angry? Male anger is just as valid as female anger. Emotions like that, the ‘flawed’ emotions, also make them more real. Because I don’t want to read a book about perfect people. Perfect people are boring. Political correctness is boring. Too sympathetic is boring.

I read a Presents a week or so ago and some of the reviews on the M&B site said that the hero was awful and some said the hero was awesome. So I bought the book to see what it was about the hero that polarised people, and well, now having read it, I can see why. He was wonderfully, gloriously arrogant and selfish and some of the things he said made me laugh because they were SO outrageous. I thought he was adorable because he’d totally embraced his selfishness and was out and proud about it. I loved it from a writer’s perspective because the author did not pull back on him and I loved it from a reader’s perspective because I could see how completely he was deluding himself.. You know he’s going to fall HARD. In fact, for me, the more arrogant and jerky the hero, the more I love it simply because of that payoff.

And I suppose that’s the rub for me. If there is no payoff, if he doesn’t fall hard, if he doesn’t grovel, then that’s where he crosses my line into douche-land.

So, I guess that’s what I’d like to know – what puts the a in a-hole for you when it comes to heroes?

Ahem.

So anyway with all this alpha-love going on around Ashenden House, it annoys the crap out of me that in my latest WIP I keep softening up my hero. I kept doing it with the skeikh and I did it in the ms before that too. In fact I keep softening them up so much that they may as well be blouses instead of alpha heroes. And not in the billowy, loose, cool pirate shirt way. More in a frilly, girly way. May as well have put a pussy-bow on them and called them Fanny.

I know why I’m doing it of course. In my head I’m thinking frantically ‘he MUST be sympathetic!’. And ‘there MUST be some soft moments right NOW!’. And ‘he MUST be likeable!’. Argh. So I keep making him gentler, making him likeable and sympathetic and….well….soft. Which for an alpha Presents hero isn’t really all that good. Because people don’t read them because they like soft men. They like them because of their powerful, alpha hot men. Who aren’t soft in ANY way.

Sigh. My real problem is the fact that in the last couple of WIPs my heroines have been strong. Very, very strong and ballsy. And that’s a problem because you have to have a hero who is even stronger and ballsier than she is. He must win their encounters – at least at the beginning. Which kind of scares me a little because I’m worried about all the things like not being sympathetic, not being likeable, hearing the word ‘alp-hole’ in my head. Opening up that alpha box all the way is scary.

However, what I need to remember is this: his motivation is EVERYTHING. No, he may not be likeable. No, he may not be sympathetic. What he needs to be is understandable. He has to have good reasons for doing what he does and if he’s properly motivated he can get away with a lot. I know I’ll forgive a hero a lot if I can understand why he acts the way he does.

The second thing I have to remember is that at the heart of the alpha is a good man. Whether he thinks he is or not, underneath everything, he’s the protector, the carer, the defender. Yes, he can act like an a-hole sometimes when he believes he’s right. Yes, he might sometimes be a little scary when he’s threatened. Yes, he’ll fight like crazy not to be vunlnerable. But fundamentally he’s a good person.

Which brings me to my current WIP. I need to get over my fear of letting my hero be who he is, which is one hell of an angry SOB. So angry in fact that my MOC story is turning into a revenge tale because he was NOT happy with just a MOC. He wanted more.

So I can’t go softening him up because it’s not in his character (soft guys don’t really pursue revenge so single-mindedly). Plus the fact that his heroine won’t take any crap, especially from him. In fact the past couple of days I’ve been rewriting a particular chapter because I realised I’d pulled back on him. So I rewrote it and just let him have his head and honestly, writing it was like watching a car-crash. You just can’t look away. I kept writing and thinking, ‘what did she say to him? Oh my god, this is going to be bad’. And then I wrote more and it’s like ‘Oh no, he did not just do that!’ It was actually kind of awesome. Because it finally felt like he was being who he was.

Right, so, my lesson for all those afraid of the alpha, is basically don’t hold back on him. Give him the proper motivation (and not just because his mummy didn’t wuv him). And trust him to be a good man. He may not be intially sympathetic or likeable, but as long as the reader can understand him, then they’ll forgive him a lot. Oh and if he’s a really bad boy, nothing like a good grovel at the end.

Anyone else have trouble with their alphas? Or are you a beta girl?

So now I’m wondering if entering my writing into contests is really a good idea. I knew my chess hero wouldn’t get anywhere because he’s a very polarising hero. He’s damaged and hard and screwed up. He’s a love him or hate him kind of guy and sure enough one judge loved him and one judge hated him. Perhaps if I’d played it safe and softened him up, he would have done better in the contest. Perhaps that’s what I should be doing with all my stories.

This is why I’m wondering if I’m making it harder for myself. Because I don’t like safe, tried and true conflicts. I like difficult, dark conflicts. I like flawed characters. Because they’re interesting and when they overcome their difficulties, the emotional pay off is that much more intense. But it IS hard to pull off and some readers just don’t like reading that kind of stuff.

It’s a conundrum. My chess player was, I think, the first character I’ve written that truly came alive to me in my head. Who made me see that my characters in previous stories were amalgams of forced together traits and conflicts, like a badly put together mosaic. But he came together really organically, as a whole person, and just leapt off the page at me. I never had to question what he would do at a particular moment in the story because I always knew, because I knew HIM as a person. He has a special place in my heart for precisely that reason and when I write now, I remember how his character came together and if I’m not feeling that way about the characters I’m currently writing then I know I have to stop and think about them some more. I must admit though that when I wrote it, I did wonder if I should pull back on him. But then to do so would have been to make him someone he wasn’t and I couldn’t do that.

So I guess that’s my conundrum, do I play it safe with the tried and true and make it easy for myself? Or do I keep writing about the characters and conflicts that interest me and perhaps make that publication goal harder? What would you do?

Maybe you don’t find that thrilling but I do. And I admire an author who manages to pull off the b*stard and yet make him believable and sympathetic. I think it’s a very fine line and probably depends a lot on the reader. One woman’s hot button is another’s ‘whatever’.

Anyway, I’m writing this post because of my chess player. He is, to be blunt, a b*stard. And he’s a b*stard to write as well because his character is very black and white (imagery!), not to mention screwed up. He does things where I have that ‘I can’t believe you just did that’ moment. And for the past few iterations of this ms, I have been trying to pull back on him because…well…I’m afraid. I don’t want him to go there because it’s not ‘heroic’ or sympathetic. And yet every time I stop him the ms goes haywire because he’s not acting in character.

So eventually I decided to let him have his head and it’s made for a very interesting ms. Especially the end, where I broke him down totally and I finally figured out why he acts the way he does. And that, I have to say, was another ‘I can’t believe you did that’! moment. Yes, the b*stard was holding out on me and only revealed his true infamy in the last chapter and it’s something that I need to consider whether to pull back or let be. I’m hoping I can pull it off. Only time will tell.

But the interesting thing has been figuring out how I can pull off a good b*stard without making him too unsympathetic and here are a few things that I reckon you need to make your b*stard hero work (as always, take with a grain of salt because, y’know, unpublished etc).

1. Motivation – you MUST have good motivation for him to do the things he does. Just because he’s angry and he’s an alpha doesn’t work. Because deep down he’s a decent guy – he has to be, he’s the hero. So there has to be a very good reason for why he doesn’t act like a decent guy at times. We may not like what he does, but if we understand it,we’re more likely to forgive him.

2. Show some humanity – you need a save the cat moment. A moment where the reader can see his innate decency.  It can be something he says or, more often, something he does. I’m particularly a fan of something nice he does for the heroine.

3. The heroine must be his equal – now, I’m not saying she needs to be a b*tch to his b*stard.  She may actually be a quiet kind of heroine. I think this depends on what he needs as a character. Does he need someone to stand up to him? Or does he really need someone who forces him to be gentle?  What can she teach him? I quite like the heroine who doesn’t get stroppy when he’s being an a-hole but kind of calms him like a horse-whisperer calming a wild stallion. Hehe. However you do it, she needs to be strong enough not to take his crap.

4. At some point he has to recogrnise his b*stardy – nothing is more annoying that a hero who behaves like an ass and gets away with it. Here is where you need your heroine to call him on it. Maybe not immediately because b*stards take time to wear down after all, but at some point he HAS to recognise when he’s being an ass.  And an apology is always nice.

5. Break him – this is the part I find most satisfying. The heroine must break him down, strip away the b*stard mask he’s hiding behind, and find the true hero he is underneath. Maisey Yates has done a fabulous post on black moments so go read it because what she says is so true. You cannot hold back when breaking these kind of heroes. The b*stard hero will hold on to his b*stardy till the bitter end. And that’s mainly because it’s the b*stards that have the deepest conflict. The most terrible of wounds. He’ll hold onto his secrets extremely hard because he’s SO terrified of confronting them. 

6. Give us an ending where he’s finally the hero he was always meant to be – mainly so we can see these guys have embraced the fact that they’re actually decent men and can now act like it.

So that’s my beginners guide to writing a b*stard. Anyone else got any great b*stard tips?? 

Such are the joys of the alpha male.

Anyway to give myself a bit of alpha practice, I’ve been redoing my Frenchman to suit Presents/Modern. Yes, it’s quite different to writing MH but to be honest, I’m quite enjoying releasing my inner emo. As you know, I LOVE teh angst. Bring on the drama, the torture, the sexy darkness! You can’t go too dark with MH – at least not as dark as I want – so letting it all hang out with a bit of Presents is actually quite liberating. Anyway, I always had a sneaking suspicion that the Frenchman erred on the Modern side of the Modern Heat line so it’s not been too much work to pull him completely over it. And I have to say, he’s happier as a Modern hero. His voice in my head wasn’t ever MH and so the rest of the ms is not all that MH is tone either. In fact I’m secretly thinking of sending the first chapter to SYTYCW, just to see what happens. Hehe.

So what’s everyone else doing? Neutered any bad boys lately?

He is rude for a reason, naturally. The heroine meets him when he is in considerable pain. For an alpha male who is the leader of a huge corporation, a man for whom control over any situation is vital to him, having some stranger see him when he is in helpless and in pain is kind of his worst nightmare. Especially when she tries to help him. So yeah, he’s rude. He doesn’t want her help. He just wants to be left alone. Unfortunately though, this makes him unsympathetic to some people. I’ve tried to make him less rude but he won’t have a bar of it. He hates the situation he’s in and makes no bones about it.

So what to do? I do have his POV a bit later in the chapter so you get a glimspe about why he’s so rude and I think I can make it clearer but maybe it’s too late by then. Certainly by chapter 2, he’s feeling very guilty at his lapse in manners but again, perhaps it’s too little too late?

But you know, I don’t think I can pull back his behaviour. I like him being helpless. He needs to be too because part of his journey is learning he can trust the heroine – and how better to do that have her rescue him when he needs help? It’s just that he really doesn’t like it, especially because he’s not in control of the situation.

Sigh. What do you reckon? Shall I take a whip to him and make him a bit nicer? That’s if I can. You ever tell an alpha male what he should or shouldn’t do?