Yes, problems with the Frenchman yet again. Honestly, I don’t know what it is about this ms that’s causing me so much grief! That man needs – in the immortal words of my paternal grandfather – a good whipping with barbed wire. Anyway, so after rewriting the first chapter five times, I then had a problem with chapter 3. It was like wading through quicksand. And I couldn’t figure out why. Luckily Dr Jax, back from his conference in Acapulco, was on hand to assist. He probably was hoping I’d leave talking about writing for at least the first hour after he’d got back in the door but he was sadly mistaken….
To cut an extremely long story short, after discussion (AKA me moaning for a good long time about how it wasn’t working), we finally figured out what wasn’t working. My characters were standing around talking. That’s it. There wasn’t anything inherently wrong with the talking – it’s all conflict – it’s just that there was no action. No one was driving the story forward. No wonder it felt static and like nothing was happening!
I have to admit that this is a problem with my stories. I love dialogue so much that I tend to get carried away with it and have times where all my characters do is witter on to each other. I think I’m better than I used to be – I used to think that standing around talking about stuff was an action that a character takes – and hey, I did recognise that there was something not working about that chapter. It also made me realise that I had the same issue in a chapter in another story that also didn’t feel right. Which is progress right?
So, instead of talking about stuff, I am going to get my hero to cease his jabbering and take some action. My heroine is a PA so what does a hero do with a PA? (mind out of the gutter please or off the desk, whichever takes your fancy) He gives her a job to do. Preferably one that she will NOT enjoy doing… 😉
Anyone else have times when writing a scene is like quicksand? What do you do about it?