Okay, so, I’ve got over my rejection. Actually I’m well over it. Much more so than the previous one. Odd considering how much time and effort I put into this story. And maybe that’s part of it. I’ve learned SO much just in the writing of it that I didn’t feel any of that effort was wasted. Certainly if I hadn’t put my all into getting that submission right, I would not have been able to write IT Girl.
Bottom line though is that I didn’t get it right. And I know why. To be honest, I suspected that I might not have pulled it off about a month after I’d sent it. Such a horrible feeling. But I really hoped I’d be given the opportunity to correct it…Sadly not. Oh well. I still think the story holds up and I do plan to rewrite it at some stage. You will not have seen the last of it!
Anyway, at least I now know the problem with one night stand stories. How to get that balance between sex and emotion. The partial was rejected because there was no emotional connection between the two characters, which made their romance unbelievable. This approach is okay for something like Blaze, but not so for MH (or any of the M&B lines probably). There HAS to be an emotional connection between the characters first. My thought was ‘but if these two felt an emotional connection, they’d run a mile. And they weren’t looking for one anyway’.
That is true. But here’s the thing – only the reader needs to get a hint of it. The characters themselves don’t need to know. Subconsciously they might feel ‘something’ is different about this person they’ve met, something that is totally unlike anything they’ve ever experienced but do you think they will admit it to themselves? No way. They’ll explain away the feeling by saying to themselves ‘it’s just physical’ or ‘it’s just that he’s unbelievably arrogant’ or that ‘I don’t like people who don’t do what I want’ or some other excuse to explain this weird intensity.
But the reader – who likes to know things the characters don’t – will be going ‘aha!’
And there you have that vital emotion. And that’s what was missing from my partial.
Interestingly, none of the other mss I’ve got suffer from that so at least I don’t have to go back and rewrite all of them!
Actually, now I think about it, that’s why this R doesn’t suck too badly. Because I know what the problem was and I can see it what I wrote. Which means I can fix it for next time.
And speaking of next time, yes, I have my next sub ready to go. Will get the eds thoughts on the premise first and if she’s interested, it’s gone!
Onwards and upwards, my friends. Gotta keep climbing that mountain. 🙂